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6th Grade Submissions! [Dec. 7th, 2009|09:51 pm]
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These are some Life Meter comics by goraina's 6th grade Afterschool Comics Workshop students! They were asked to write and draw a comic based on their favorite game, and we promised to post them here. Please give them some feedback, as they'd love to hear it!

Transforming Popping Kirby, by Andru

Job Try-Outs for Mario, by Liam

One Day in Dreamland, by Kees

Blazing Angels, by Alessandro

Metal Gear Solid 4, by Nuridin

[User Picture]From: semisuite
2009-12-08 03:17 am (UTC)


These are spectacular, they brought a smile to my face!

I hope you all continue to do comics! Keep up the good work!
[User Picture]From: gregmce
2009-12-08 03:33 am (UTC)


Hey, thanks for sharing all of these with us!

Andru: This was fun! I like how you use your panels to tell a story almost like frames in an animation. When Kirby starts growing you have him get bigger in just the right amount with each new panel. Kirby's expression right before he pops made me laugh a lot.

Liam: Yay for Mario! I've always liked Mario Brothers ever since the original Nintendo came out. You do a good job of telling a feud in just a few short panels, and the surprise guest star at the end was a clever twist.

Kees: Twenty panels? Wow! This was really ambitious but I think you pulled it off. Kirby bouncing down the tunnel has a great sense of motion, especially when he gives out the little, "aaa!" cry at the end. His fight against the bad guy is really nicely drawn too; Kirby with the sword looks good and the fuse on the bomb is perfect. Very cool!

Alessandro: What I like about your comic is that even though I don't know the game this is about, it's still a short-but-sweet story that I was able to enjoy. The "only one angel?" off-screen comment was good, and the way you mix the red and the yellow colors into rings made it look really cool. Great use of color!

Nuridin: This is going to sound strange, but my favorite thing here? The sound-effect panel of "Shank." The way you drew your page, it actually drew my eyes down from the second panel (up in the upper right-hand corner) down to the next row of panels below. Then again, my second favorite bit was the "thump" when the heavy sword smacks down onto the ground. It's a funny end to the page.

Great job, everyone! You've got a sharp group of students.
From: artboyjb
2009-12-08 03:36 am (UTC)

Comment on Comics


The work is all great and shows a terrific use of imagination. Computers are great and I use one all the time but when it all comes down to it a person who can take a pencil and a piece of paper and create something out of thin air is one of the most important people in the world. Imagination is the one thing we all share. I draw every day and I encourage everyone to do the same.
[User Picture]From: mattbayne
2009-12-08 03:46 am (UTC)


These are great.

Transforming Popping Kirby is really cute. Nice commitment in the inking. And I like the sfx balloon in panel 10, too.

Liam shows a good sense of timing with just the right amount left in the gutters in Job Tryouts for Mario.

You know I like extended fight scenes, so I can appreciate the effort that went into One Day in Dreamland by Kees. And the ending made me laugh.

Allessandro made me laugh, too. Very clever to make fun of one's own narrative!

Solid Snake, train more! Less sneaking around, more combat training! Nice job, Nuridin!
[User Picture]From: elio
2009-12-08 04:19 am (UTC)


Those were all really good comics! I hope all of the artist continue to draw!
From: (Anonymous)
2009-12-08 04:47 am (UTC)

games comics!


I really like that these comics are based on games! A theme is a great way to get some ideas brewing.

Andru - I really like your selective use of colour, and the growing Kirby panels have great flow! His expression in panel 9 is hilarious.

Liam - Mario tryouts is a really funny concept! You've got some very nice illustrations of action here, when the goomba gets stomped and the guy falls into the lava.

Kees - I like how you set this one up with the second panel (secret files). Kirby looks great when he's fighting - it really looks like he's using that sword! You've got some good panel variation too; close-ups and wide shots.

Alessandro - Yours gets right to the point, which can be a really good thing in comics sometimes! And great use of colour - especially with the fire. Nice punchline at the end, too!

Nuridin - The last panel is really funny, and the "thump" really works to drive the punchline home. It's cool how you can use simple stick figures in comics and still tell a good story. Comics are all about the pictures AND the words!

I hope you guys keep making lots of comics!


[User Picture]From: qwantz
2009-12-08 12:30 pm (UTC)


Aww, adorable!
[User Picture]From: doubleare
2009-12-08 03:25 pm (UTC)


These are all pretty awesome.

Andru's Kirby strip worked great to show how he went through the different stages. I liked the way he used color, too.

Liam made my day by having Kirby in a Mario suit.

Kees did some wonderful illustrations. Very professional looking.

Allesandro's Burning Angels strip was probably my favorite of all. He just went all out with the name and it was hilarious. Great colors, too.

Nuridin's MGS4 strip gets a special place in my heart for using stick figures. hehe And I love that it was titled as an "Exclusive Scene". That's so great.
[User Picture]From: chrisschweizer
2009-12-08 05:58 pm (UTC)


Wow, guys, great work! I wish I had been this good at your age!
[User Picture]From: cleahpatra
2009-12-08 06:08 pm (UTC)


These are AWESOME!
[User Picture]From: lordrexfear
2009-12-08 06:34 pm (UTC)


I loved these.

Thank you for sharing and thank you for helping shape the future comic stars!

I see that good ol Kirby is quite popular.

I'm impressed by Alessandro pulling something as obscure as Blazing Angels. I wouldn't expect someone under 15 being into WWII flight simulation.
From: (Anonymous)
2009-12-09 04:56 am (UTC)



Y'all's comics are great. I remember when I was making stuff like that in 6th grade. Makes me wanna get a masters in Sequential Art. Really! Who needs Industrial Design?

JA Ramos (35 years old, Industrial Design Masters student)
[User Picture]From: reecord2
2009-12-09 12:39 pm (UTC)


Oh my God I could read these all day.
[User Picture]From: suburbatory
2009-12-09 01:36 pm (UTC)


Great job, y'all!
[User Picture]From: cat_alex
2009-12-09 07:08 pm (UTC)


I love all of these! So cute and imaginative!
From: neosamurai
2009-12-09 10:24 pm (UTC)


This is very awesome
[User Picture]From: xris60
2009-12-10 02:47 pm (UTC)


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From: (Anonymous)
2010-01-14 07:49 pm (UTC)

Interesting, but...


While I credit the kids for their imagination, I also dis-credit the parenting these kids are receiving. Some of the video games portrayed were games only meant for mature audiences due to sequences that include on-screen murder-by-firearm or by knife. These kids should never have been allowed to play these games until they were well into their mid to late teens. Shame on those moms and dads for being oblivious about what they purchase for their kids.